授课型硕士申请中优秀/平庸的个人陈述示例
示例1. 市场营销
“I am really interested in doing a postgraduate marketing course as I hope to make this my career. I think your course offers me the opportunity to learn a great deal about marketing and will help me to get a good job in this field.”
这个例子太过模糊，只说明了申请者将从课程中获得什么，却没有证据证明对课程是否有研究或是其对你未来职业道路的帮助。以下是一份更有针对性、研究更充分的个人陈述：
“I am very committed to a career in marketing and have been to several presentations on this career area and have undertaken a period of work experience in a small marketing agency. As a result, I have decided that undertaking a postgraduate marketing course would be an essential next step towards my career ambition. I am particularly interested in the course offered at Littletown University as it combines practical placements in both marketing agencies and company departments with the theoretical study of the principles of marketing. I would also value being able to begin to work towards the Chartered Institute of Marketing qualification offered by the course.”
示例2. 工程硕士
“I am currently studying for a BEng in Electrical and Electronic Engineering and would like to continue onto a masters course. I have enjoyed my undergraduate course and want to specialise further in the areas of my course that I have enjoyed the most. I have looked at a number of different courses and have made applications for several different ones as I am not yet totally sure of which area of electronic engineering I would like to follow more closely...”
虽然第一个句子作为一般的开头语句读起来相当不错，但是其余部分却很糟糕。这位申请者甚至没有决定要专攻哪个领域，以及为什么要专攻这个领域，那么课程导师会认为提供一个位置给他是具有潜在风险的。以下是更具针对性的示例：
“I am currently studying for a BEng Electrical and Electronic Engineering. I have particularly enjoyed my final year module in electronic communications technology and am about to begin my final year research project in this area. My interest has also been stimulated by attending lectures delivered by industrialists, for example, Richard Smith, a design and development engineer, working for MobPhones Worldwide Ltd. From listening to these lectures, I realised that I would like to study communications technology in more depth and to be able to eventually undertake research in this fascinating field...”
发表于 2020-3-6 10:34:00
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